I like how Yoko shades Lyra's ears when she blushes, it's good stuff.
Another shout out, thank you, and acknowledgment to Qsy who is my go-to expert on all things French. They are amazing, give them props for helping me with my worldbuilding. I promise I'll stop asking you about the boring stuffy French stuff and get into the cooler aspects of it soon.
As a general note: "Sain" is not a typo - I try to avoid any Christian terminology in here to keep things as open to interpretation as possible. The "t" has moved into the next word because things change phonetically over time. The Elven Capital here is one of the oldest cities in the world, and the Elves place a lot of value on their traditions and history. Therefore, their city's name is often argued by scholars to be one of the most preserved artifacts from history.